Copyright -Claire Fuller
“No smoking! Keep that signboard always in mind,” the workshop owner guided new employee Neil, around the place. “And yeah, don’t get nervous if you see Teddy around. He still comes by and keeps things in check.”
Neil assumed Teddy to be some supervisor.
At night shift, Neil was all by himself welding the metal. Tired, he took out a cigarette. He remembered the warning, but shrugged and lighted anyways. He heard loud footsteps approaching him and next moment a tight slap!
“That was Teddy,” the owner told him next day. He had died in fire-accident and still kept watch.
Copyright 2014 © Nandini Deka
Dear Nandini,
ReplyDeleteEvery shop should have a Teddy. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
thanks for the great prompt @Rochelle
DeleteThat LAST line grabbed me. Good Job.
ReplyDeletethanks for reading :-) have a nice day
DeleteWow! Amazing ND! :)
ReplyDeletethanks @Soumya
DeleteThat was eerie! Nicely written.
ReplyDeletethanks...glad you found it eerie :-)
DeleteTeddy sure made a change
ReplyDeleteyup!! he did :-)
DeleteTeddy is certainly an interesting character. i enjoyed reading this :)
ReplyDeletethanks for reading :-)
DeleteI love ghosts who slapped ya upside the head for being stupid.
ReplyDeleteyea rite...i love them too :D
DeleteGreat story!
ReplyDeletethanks for reading :-) have a nice day
DeleteWow.. Amazing story !
ReplyDeletethanks dear :-)
Deletewoww that's a nice twist. Well Written.
ReplyDeletethanks @Rajlakshmi
DeleteNice! There's no getting around Teddy, I'm sure. Now, we just need a Teddy for illegal parking, people who use the bathroom and don't wash their hands...:)
ReplyDeleteThat was a surprising twist in the end! I had guessed teddy to be some animal like watch dog in the beginning :)
ReplyDeletethanks dear..
DeleteHi - I used the ghost theme too. Yours is only the 4th post I have read so I'llbe interested to see how many more there are of us!
ReplyDeleteheya...i read yours and loved it :-)
DeleteOh, that's great! And a having a ghost around must cut their costs for security!
ReplyDeleteI'm not writing this week, but I'd love it if you'd drop by my blog for a second anyway, I posted a big announcement today.
yep!!! thanks :-)
DeleteInteresting take on the prompt :)
ReplyDeleteGreat build up to the moment of slap that I could hear the tight sound. Nice! :-)
ReplyDeletethanks for reading @Mahesh
DeleteWow! A great story with a nice underlying message in just 100 words. Like like!
ReplyDeletethanks @kunal
DeleteDelightful ! :D
ReplyDelete:D
DeleteSimple and Meaningful.
ReplyDeletethanks :-)
DeleteOoh...that's one of the rare ghost stories where ghosts do something more meaningful than killing people! Good one!
ReplyDeletethanks dear...FYI...i don't think ghosts can kill people except in movies ;-)
DeleteReally loved this Nandini:-)If only we had such a "Teddy" everywhere,so many accidents would never ever happen!Well done!
ReplyDeleteI'd actually be very scared if there were Teddys everywhere :D thanks dear...
DeleteI approve of ghosts being put to use, instead of wandering around scaring people for no good reason. There's a whole free workforce out there in the 'life to come'! Nice story.:)
ReplyDeleteoh..yea...they can be pretty useful too :-))
DeleteThank God! There is no Teddy in my company premisis.
ReplyDeletehahaha =))
DeleteGood for Teddy. Nice little story.
ReplyDeletethanks @Patrick :-)
DeletePerfect little story, Nandini. You didn't waste a word.
ReplyDeleteyep..tried not to :-) thanks
DeleteOooh, that gave me the chills!!!
ReplyDeleteurs was a creepy one too..different kinda :D
DeleteLol funny story, every place should have a ghost like that one.
ReplyDeletethat'd be very scary :D
DeleteShort and sweet. Good one.
ReplyDeleteurs was one of kind =)
Deletevery nice story nandini. shocking revelation. good one.
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