Naina kept looking at the wall clock...it was normally not her habit to check the time every few minutes.
But, today was special...she had a huge surprise waiting for her mother.
She had baked a cake, the most colourful cake ever...for her mother, who'd return from work any moment.
The decorations were lovely and she was sure it'd make her mother proud and happy.
Her mother had no idea secretly Naina would eagerly learn cooking lessons; anything to be of use.
Indebted forever as she was - since her mother signed those adoption papers and brought her home.
Nandini, I love the sentiments in your story. I can only imagine what Naina's circumstances were before she was adopted.
ReplyDeleteDear Nandini,
ReplyDeleteThe ending line added a sweet chapter to your story. It made me smile.
Shalom,
Rochelle
I sense an anxiety in Naina
ReplyDeleteThe eagerness to please born out of gratitude. Good story.
ReplyDeleteThat is real love!
ReplyDeleteAwww...love it!
ReplyDeletevery moving and oh the surprise that she learned how to bake and decorate -such skill
ReplyDeleteGratitude takes many forms. James M.
ReplyDeleteHow thoughtful! (Sandra)
ReplyDeleteThis has such a moving and sweet twist in the end. Her mother will cry, I'm sure.
ReplyDeleteThe above was from me.
DeleteIt is wonderful to have such a grateful daughter.
ReplyDeleteBrenda Cox
ReplyDeleteA sweet story of love and gratitude. Her mother will be so touched, I think!
DeleteWOW-Good!
ReplyDeleteI love how your story ended, simply delightful.
ReplyDeleteAww, such a nice surprise laden with love. -thisobscurelife
ReplyDeleteSweet!
ReplyDeletewhat a wonderful daughter. i'm sure she'll make her mom proud.
ReplyDeleteLovely story about wanting to give back to the woman who changed her life.
ReplyDeleteGratitude can make hard things easy.
ReplyDeleteAww what a touching story
ReplyDeleteWow, such a hauntingly poignant line. 💔 It immediately evokes a sense of lifelong obligation and the complicated, heavy emotions tied to family and identity. The phrasing—“Indebted forever as she was”—carries such weight, and the revelation of the mother’s role in the adoption papers adds depth, tension, and a quiet, simmering conflict. It’s the kind of line that lingers in the mind, demanding the reader to feel the character’s inner world.
ReplyDeleteThe cake is a beautifully bold show of appreciation!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much @@all!!! Really appreciate all your lovely comments...
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