She stood looking across the fence. It didn’t exist before. After the war ended, borders were hastily drawn. Neighbours who were previously friends, had turned bitter foes.
Mary sighed as she remembered that fateful night.
She had crept up stealthily to their secret meeting place, where Harry was waiting for her. They hugged and kissed, unaware of what was in store.
Bullet shots startled them out of their union. Harry pushed Mary towards safety of the nearby woods, and took out his shot-gun. What followed was a bloody battle, and Harry killed.
Their crime ~ they belonged to rival cliques.
Copyright 2014 © Nandini Deka
A good fight is always a pleasure to read.This one had love, or destroyed love. Not sure about that last line. Opportunity for more tension in other wording, maybe a character speaking it.
ReplyDeletethanks :-)
DeleteElegantly simple. Excellent.
ReplyDeletehey, thanks a lot :-)
DeleteYeah, that just about sums it up, all right. Thanks for this!
ReplyDeletethanks for reading :-)
DeleteThe fence is not only a physical barricade but is meant to divide love and hearts.
ReplyDelete:-)
DeleteA sad story that's no doubt been repeated all to many times throughout history and countries.
ReplyDeletejanet
yup...you're right...
Deleteall too many
ReplyDeleteLike the surviving Juliet.. and knowing that it all started with them.. this feel like you have made a different end totally.. very good.
ReplyDeleteI have to tell you Nandini, I like your writing, but unless I'm mistaken I have never seen you leave a single comment on any other story.. I might be wrong but I think this is a community and some level of reciprocity is expected I think..
thanks :-)
DeleteThere are good fence s and then there are one which are bad !
ReplyDeleteNice one here...
Dear Nandini,
ReplyDeleteA sad ending to an ill-fated union. Good one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Nandini, Fighting among neighbors is an old sad story and has been repeated for thousands of years. Good story with a lot of action. Well written. :) ---Susan
ReplyDeleteA sad story. Repeated over the millennia across the globe.
ReplyDeleteLovely story.... Rival cliques are always a bad place to atart love. Well done
ReplyDeleteSad and all too realistic. Well told
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