The gun-shots were finally over; it was all quiet now when just moments ago it was utter chaos; Sussie looked around getting up slowly from the corner where she hid.

Police had everything under-control; they shot each one of the terrorists down, who held the Mall hostage.

With a lump in her throat, Sussie remembered how one of the terrorists had almost caught her from behind.

Nervous, she gulped, too afraid to make any noise, but, everything was back to normal…until…

Puzzled, she saw a body lying, dead; it was her – too late, she’d been already sucked into waves of after-live.

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  1. Anonymous07:11

    I like your story very much! Too bad she died! Good story! Nan

  2. quite the twist at the end and struck a chord of realism in me with the gunmen at the mall.

  3. Recent in the news, so sad, but she crossed over and hopefully to a place where violence does not exist.

  4. An interesting take. someone suggested it could almost be the follow up to mine.

  5. I had a niggling thought that she died.

  6. Better out of it methinks! Nice one.
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  7. That was a shock ending. It worked really well if the viewpoint was that of a survivor / witness to a shooting, but it's even more powerful when we learn the truth.

  8. I think you are in the league of writers like George R. R. Martin. All men must die.

  9. Great story! Surprise at the end. She seemed so alive...until she wasn't!

  10. thanks a lot everyone :-)


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